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第21章 模板作文赏析(5)

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A Theft Incident

Yesterday,I witnessed a theft incident on my way home.A woman took her wallet out and paid for a newspaper at Xinzhuang around 9:00am.She put her wallet back and turned to Ieave when a mid-aged man rushed past her muttering“Excuse me”.She didn‘t notice her wallet was missing.

The rampant pickpocket has become a national epidemic and poses a grave threat to residents’and visitors‘property safety.Pickpocket prevention,a heary task for police,makes sense.All sides involved in this problem must join their forces to remove this social cancer.

We all expect“A World Without Thieves”.Everyone shares the huge responsibility for demonstrating his justice at proper time.Personal responsibility is vital to building a socialist harmonious society.

妙语评析:这是一篇比较典型的记叙文。根据提纲共分了三个段落。第一段描述了在公共场所的扒窃事件,交代了事件发生的背景和经过,引出了主题。第二段主要是谴责了扒窃这种行为,语言很到位。第三段是通过这起事件作出的总结,我们每个人都要有正义感。最后一段引用的电影名称为文章增加了趣味性。文中用黑体标出的句子为贯穿每个段落主题句,也是此文中的经典句型。

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1._________,I witnessed_________on my way home.

2.All sides involved in this problem must_________.

3.We all expect_________.

4.Everyone shares_________at proper time.

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_________,I witnessed_________on my way home._________.

_________become a national epidemic and poses a grave threat to_________._________,makes sense.All sides involved in this problem must_________.

We all expect_________.Everyone shares_________at proper time.Personal responsibility is vital to building_________.

Directions:For this part,you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic My Most Respectable Teacher.You should write at Ieast 120words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

请描述一位你最尊敬的老师,并讲述一下你为什么尊敬他(她)。

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My Most Respectable Teacher

In my life,I have met many teachers who are really worth recalling.But the most respectable teacher is my Chinese Ianguage teacher,Mr.Zhang.

What frequently brings back my memories of the teacher is his special qualities.First of all,I was attracted by his lively wit.I remember that we always anticipated his class with great eagerness because his Iecture was humorously delivered,never failing to provoke chuckles or Ioud Iaughters.Second,he gave us the greatest gift a teacher could offer an awakening of passion for learning.He not only Ied us to an appreciation of the beauty and perfection of Chinese and Iiterature,but also aroused our great interest in exploring something deeper in this field.

AIthough it has been nearly 10years since I attended his Iast class,I often think of him,and I know he has already stayed in my heart.

妙语评析:这是一篇混合型记叙文,文中既有记叙的成分也有感受。首先文章内容完整,结构紧凑,能给人留下深刻的印象。文中用黑体标出的句子是记叙文常用句式,又是此文章中的骨干句。

句型模板

1.In my Iife,I have_________.

2.What frequently brings back my memories_________.

3.First of all,I was_________.

4.Second,_________.

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Topic

In my Iife,I have_________.But the most_________.

What frequently brings back my memories_________.First of all,I was_________.Second,_________.

AIthough it has been_________,I often_________,and I know_________.

Directions:For this part,you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic A Real Test in My Life.You should write at Ieast 120words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

1.叙述你人生中一次真正的考验。

2.这次考验的经过。

3.你的感受与得到的启示。

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A Real Test in My Life

It happened when I was ten years old.I was asked to deliver a speech before the whole class for the first time.It impressed me most because it is the first real test in my life.What happened next was quite unforgettable.

At first,I stood on the platform,my mind blank and my Iegs trem-bling.Almost at the same time,my teacher encouraged me with a smile.What’s more,my classmates waited patiently without any signs of rushing me.As a result,I found myself back,stammering out my speech and finished it with their applaud.

As I understand,what I made was far beyond a simple speech.On one hand,my fear for speaking before an audience disappeared.On the other hand,I got to know that the greatest obstacle on our way to success is our fear.In conclusion,as Iong as we overcome the fear and Iet our potential out,we will achieve our goals.

妙语评析:这是一篇混合型记叙文,描述了整个事件及事件带来的感受和启示。根据所给的提纲,本文分了三段。不错的模板作文。文中用黑体标出的句子是记叙文中的经典句型,使文章的结构增加了亮点。

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1.It happened_________.

2.It impressed me most because_________.

3.As I understand,_________.

4.In conclusion,_________.

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It happened_________.I was_________.It impressed me most because_________.What happened_________.

At first,_________.AImost at the same time,_________.What’s more,_________.As a result,_________.

As I understand,_________.On one hand,_________.On the other hand,_________.In conclusion,_________.

Directions:For this part,you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic Families of the Past,Present and Future.You should write at Ieast 150words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

请描述人们过去和现在的家庭情况,并畅想人们未来的家庭情况。

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Families of the Past,Present and Future

Since the beginning of the century,great changes have been made in families.It is because of the development of industry that families have become much smaller than they were before.

In the past when more people lived in the countryside,a typical family had many children.In a family,parents and their children Iived with grandparents.Often,too,uncles and aunts Iived nearby.Women traditionally stayed at home,with their husbands working in the fields.

But since industry became more important,agriculture families have become smaller.Moreover,industry requires wokers who are ready and able to move off the Iand and to move again wherever necessary,and more and more women began to earn money by working outside.So smaller families can move from place to place.