书城外语六级写作速成的秘密:3个月写出好成绩
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第25章 模板作文赏析(6)

First and foremost,the equality between parents and children.The parents are not always superior to their children,and the children do not always need to obey their parents’order,that is,they are more like close friends.

Second,the independent personality.Western people have a strong sense of supporting themselves and being independent.They begin earning their pocket money early in their life,even as kids.

Last,Western people do not always assess a person according to his background.If only he can achieve success through personal struggle,he can win status.It‘s a talent-oriented society,not background-oriented.

妙语评析:本文第一段先说明了西方确实有让我们值得学习的地方,第二段开始把自己欣赏西方的哪些方面阐述出来,比如父母与孩子的平等关系,独立性等,并且说明原因。

句型模板

1.First and foremost,_______________Second,Last,_______________

2.If only_______________can win status_______________.

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Topic

Despite_______________there do exist some_______________First and foremost,_______________that is,_______________Second,_______________Last,_______________,_______________have a strong sense of_______________

If only_______________can win status._______________

Direction:for this part,you are allowed 30miutes to write a composition about the“Aid Education in China.”You write at least 150words and base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below:

1.每年,高校的大学生都被鼓励去贫困地区去支教

2.支教活动产生的意义

3.我的看法

范文欣赏

Aid Education in China

With the increasing number of graduates are hard to fnd a suitable job,so each year,many college students are encouraged to aid students in the poverty—stricken areas,volunteer themselves in poor villages for a year and try to improve education in poor areas.

Aid—education has been benefcial in two aspects.From one thing,college volunteers are really devoted to the cause.They have opened the eyes of students in underdeveloped regions to the outside world by bringing them new knowledge and thoughts.As a result,they are extremely well—received by the children there.From another thing,college students have received a rigorous training by adapting to the diffcult living conditions.They are enjoying the appreciation and friendship from the children who lived the poor area.What’s more,they are greatly inspired by the moving and tireless spirit of the children.

In my opinion,China‘s educational development can’t be isolated from each individual and our college students should take the lead in response to the appeal for offering aid to children in poor areas and take good educational system,because wehave our responsibilities to give them a bright future.

妙语评析:这篇范文首先在第一段说明了每年都有很多高校的大学生去贫困地区支教,然后在第二段从多层面多角度详细阐述了支教活动所产生的重大意义,在第三段把自己的观点表述出来。

句型模板

1.With the increasing number of_______________

2.has been benefcial in two aspects.

3.From one thing,_______________As a result,_______________From another thing,_______________What‘s more,

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Topic

With the increasing number of_______________are hard to_______________,so_______________.

_______________has been benefcial in two aspects.From one thing_______________.

From another thing,_______________.What’s more,_______________.

In my opinion,China‘s educational development_______________.

应用文14例

一写作重点

1.是否使用了正确的语法结构,比方说,动词时态一致、主谓一致、用词准确、词性(尤其是名词、动词、形容词)、名词单复数、冠词错误和介词错误。

2.句式是否有变化(如各种从句的使用、分词结构等)。

3.是否使用了一定的高级词汇(如用同义词或词组来避免过多的重复)。

4.标点、拼写是否没有错误。

5.在每段的主题句中是否都表明了这个段落的中心思想,是否所有扩展句都紧扣主题。

6.是否使用了过渡性词语,使句子之间和段落之间都有逻辑性和条理性。

7.每一段话是否都得到充分的展开。

8.是否提供了足够的细节、例子或论据。

9.明确的观点。

10.每一段话是否都紧扣文章的主题。

1、3、4、6为考试时检查的重点。优先检查首段和每段的首末句。

二模板作文赏析

对这类题型,通常分为5个步骤来写:

第一段、文章开头:称呼

第二段、寒暄语句,引出写信的目的:

寒暄句+主题句(注:寒暄句和主题句可以是同一个句子)

第三段、根据提纲扩展主体段落:

主题句+扩展句1+扩展句2+扩展句3

第四段、表明自己的观点,并结束书信主体段落

在最后要他谈自己的看法

第五段、寒暄句+落款

Directions:For this part,you are allowed 30minutes to write a letter of application for a MBA program in Columbia University.You should write at least 150words following the outline given below:

1.介绍你目前所学专业;

2.介绍个人特长爱好以及性格;

3.说明为什么申请该校的MBA。

范文欣赏

Dear Sir,

I am writing in the hope that I may obtain an opportunity to further my study in the MBA program in your university.

My name is Li Ming,and I am an undergraduate student of Marketing in Nanjing University.During the last four years,I have been studying hard and also working hard for the Students’Union.I am careful to keep a balance between study and extracurricular activities.I have won from the university various scholarships for my good study and my effcient Student‘s Union work.

I’m interested in business and wish I could further my study overseas.I choose Columbia University because you have a long history and enjoy a good reputation in this field.I believe my interests are extremely congruent with the strengths of your school,and my solid academic background will meet your general entrance requirements for graduate study.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely yours,

Li Ming

妙语评析:信的第一段首先说明了写信的目的——申请该校的MBA,第二段开始叙述自己所学的专业以及所取得的成就,第三段列举自己的兴趣和特长,说明自己是很适合去该校学习深造的。

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1.I am writing in the hope that_______________

2.My name is_______________,and I am an undergraduate student of_______________in_______________.

3.During the last four years,_______________

4.I‘m interested in_______________and wish I could 1further my study overseas.

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Dear××,

I am writing in the hope that_______________

My name is_______________,and I am an undergraduate student of_______________in_______________.During the last four years,.

I’m interested in_______________and wish I could further my study overseas.I believe_______________

Yours sincerely,

×××